Ted Iliff commented on "Local councils help Indian women recover from domestic abuse" (9 months ago)

This provides interesting insight into a local response to a global problem – domestic violence. The quotes from the women gave a personal touch to the issue. The story would have been stronger if you had actually attended a hearing and reported on that, but that might not be allowed under this system.

Details: The summary was too long, so it was rewritten. “Standard VII” is not known to everyone, so it was changed. A full name of sources is preferred; if only one name is used, that should be noted in the text. Statistics from 1996 are too old to still be valid, so that fact was cut. Data on the U.S. and UK seemed out of place because the problem is so universal, so the statement about it being a global problem was stronger as well as defensible in terms of journalism. The line between the two Panchkaran quotes was not needed; the point was made in the quotes themselves. The quote from Rajbala needed a “set-up” line, which was added. The story had some imprecise numbers (about 20, two or three hearings); there should be a way to make these exact.

Ted Iliff commented on "Artists, officials argue over cause of river pollution" (10 months ago)

You had the right idea by the way you started the story, but the wording was a bit rough, so it was rewritten.
The wording throughout needed extensive repairs, but the story is interesting and an unusual look at an important issue in India. Also, your original writing assumed that the reader knew about the festival. It’s always best to add background for an international audience, even if you think what you’re writing is obvious.
Your photos helped to understand what the idols looked like, but you did not explain why they are headless.

Ted Iliff commented on "Google Chrome needs 'Browsing'!!" (10 months ago)

Good: This is very informative and authoritative--an impressive review.
Needs work: The headline does not seem to be matched by the content of the story.