Ramzan Lakhani commented on "A legacy called Sahir Ludhianvi" (5 months ago)

Hi Krishna,

Thanks for sharing this information.

Just a quick correction though: I believe he died at the age of 59 and not 49.

Regards.

Harumi Gondo commented on "Illness = Bankruptcy?" (about 1 year ago)

Again, you're tapping into interesting and pertinent topics here, but you can develop the story more, as you only briefly touch the topic. Please see my comments on your China article as they are applicable to your writing here.

Harumi Gondo commented on "Financial regulation overhaul: The next big US debate?" (about 1 year ago)

Your writing here is more clear and careful. You could improve things a bit by tightening your writing, taking out extraneous words and phrases. For example, "A Washington Post report says that the struggle could “dominate Washington debate” in the coming months." could be " The Washington Post reports that the struggle could “dominate Washington debate” in the coming months."'
Be sure to credit your sources, though, because plagiarism, even short phrases, is always a dangerous place to tread.

Harumi Gondo commented on "‘Interesting’ times ahead for China " (about 1 year ago)

Hi Krishna: your story has potential in that you seem to touch upon good ideas. I encourage you to develop and back up your ideas a bit more.
In terms of the writing, your writing is a bit "stream-of-consciousness" with run-on sentences and a rush of information. It may not be as effective in communicating a clear message.
Conversely, there are some awkward phrasings and grammar problems that slow down your writing.
Be clear in your writing, (try not to use "it" when "it" is not very clear; also try to use vivid, precise words such as "decline" rather than "go down."
For example, you write, "Global trade was a win-win situation for all, that is, till the global economic crisis set in. Now, with most of the rich countries increasingly becoming protectionist, it has started shrinking and according to the World Trade Organization (WTO), could go down nine percent this year." A better way to phrase this may be: "Global trade was a win-win situation for all until the global economic crisis. With most developing countries increasingly becoming protectionist, trade has begun shrinking, and the World Trade Organization (WTO) has predicted that it could decline by nine percent this year."